Story: "Mending Hearts" by Katharine Swartz from the March 27, 2007 issue.
Tagline: Marielle didn’t believe the locket—or her heart—could be mended…
What follows is an analysis of a Woman's World story with a mind toward what works and doesn't work for me as a writer, peppered with some personal opinion, too. :)
This was a nice solid story, but nothing out of the ordinary. For those of you who took my class, you’ll have noticed the plot in which a loved one’s advice is followed. You should also note that the story did not have a climax.
Best Part: The double meaning of the title was clever.
In My Humble Opinion “Sorry. That wasn’t very smooth was it? I’m not good at this stuff,” he blushed.
Sheesh. He blushes. (Not only that, but he blushes the dialogue.) I like beta heroes, but this is a little namby-pamby for me.
Grade: B
Labels: Woman's World Review
4 Comments:
No climax, huh? Hmmm...
Gaucho, you're such a perv. WW stories don't have THOSE kinds of climaxes. LOL
Darn! And here I thought that namby-pamby was a new kind of foreplay.
As the writer of this story, I agree with your assessment--but keep in mind that Woman's World takes liberty (changes) with the short stories they buy--ie, the blushing thing. My heroes don't blush--especially not the dialogue! :)
Kate H.
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